Feedback Of our opening sequence ROUGH COPY

As we finished our opening sequence as a rough cut we uploaded the video to YouTube to gain some feedback from others and more importantly from our teachers. With feedback we could then improve on our opening sequence to gain the best mark possible.

The above screen grab is a comment from our media teachers on our YouTube video to help us improve. Due to the feedback we received we are going to make some changes to our opening sequence:
First of all we will alter the font as this is dropping our marks. Not only shall we take on board the comment and make it more scratched we shall also change the colour as I believe it looks too blood red which therefore doesn't really relate to our storyline on it being based on a possessed girl.
Another element that we will add to our opening sequence is another scene at the end after the title. This would make this look more like an opening sequence other than a trailer. We have decided to film 4 teenagers walking through a forest and finding the abandoned factory.
The four teenagers we will use are Michael and Luke from our group and our two friends George and Katherine. So we do not have the problem before whereby our characters were busy with other commitments we have decided to film in the half term where this wouldn't be a problem.